Monday, April 19, 2010

The color of blood

The color of blood

The color of blood is red,

So was the color of my eye.

The red colored blood-soaked punches,

Were telling the story of battle so high.

My eyes were swelled,

He had his eyeball in his hand.

I was bleeding

But he was pleading

Mercy was the last thing on my head

Till I did beat him to the death

I had a cut on my chest

I swear I shifted his heart from centre to left

Last thing I remember that I was leading

But the other one was profusely bleeding

When I woke up I felt the pain

My blood being transfused in his veins

I forgot but I felt on the hospital bed

The color of our blood is always red.

Diwakar

12 comments:

  1. The rhyming is well done, but frankly the purpose and central meaning of the poem doesn't come out clearly. It's more like a fight scene rather than the concept of 'Our blood is alaways red'... you can do better next time. But u tried something different is what counts more.

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  2. Thanks Amit... Actually its a fight scene only... 'The color of blood is always red' denotes a lot of things like we are human, we all have many a similar qualities but some of us are able to explore them & some are not... like here we have same color of blood but 'I' won the battle. But point taken sir. Next time it will be better... :)

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  3. proove it practically,,,, #:P

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  4. saaleee...... when did u strt writinn.... damnnn....its true.... i wish the world realises it b4 its too late... its very nice.... write more... all da vry best ....:-)

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  5. thanks Gaurav... I will try to write more & much better>

    A.B.. Please understand the meaning & not the words...

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  6. hehehehe jst joking... :p
    btw well said..

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  7. Very well written.....An amazingly detailed scene of a ferocious battle between two guys.... I was actually able to imagine the scene in my mind :)

    Keep writing bro......

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  8. @ thanks bro.. I promise I will keep writing and improving

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  9. Well done Diwakar. This should be the beginning of many more imaginations to come true on paper... All the best..

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  10. very well written diwakar. never knew this side to you! Not only does the message come out clearly, its rhythmically sound too.
    you certainly should write more..

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  11. Good one..!!!

    Like it..!!!

    Keep sharing..!!!

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